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Fitting In
I wrote this to kelkyag's prompt "May I suggest something in Mayin's story for 'fitting in'?"

“What do I intend to do with him?” Mayin repeated the Ambassador’s question. “I am not required to do anything with Oberxiao Huhn, sir, and with that luxury in hand I intend to take my time in deciding what to do about the situation.”

“A fair answer,” the Ambassador acknowledged. “I have wondered, as a matter of personal curiosity, how did you hide the trigger that Jan-li tripped to set off that explosion? I always thought he was too sharp eyed to get caught by anything obvious.”

Mayin regarded him, the rest of the table, then the maimed man standing beside her. “Oberxiao Huhn didn’t trigger the explosion, Ambassador, I did. I knew someone would be pursuing me at that point and I intended that the pursuit would end there.” There was a sharp intake of breath from the civilian-clothed young man at the table, and Mayin added, drawing herself up, “I am a Shadow in the Dark and I intended to kill.”

“As was proper, Lang Mugou, and no-one is trying to corner you about it now.” He glared at the Ambassador’s aide and put his left hand, the one that was still his own flesh, on her back in what he hoped she would accept as a supportive gesture, “Allow me to return you to your brother and his wife with the hope that we may dance again later.”

Mayin let him guide her around the dance floor back to her brother, Edan, and his wife, Ley. “Lang Mugou?” She was gentle in her questioning with an element of surprise behind it. “Where did that come from?”

“It was what we called you,” his hand was still warm on her back, “before it was decided that such naming of our enemies inflated them in our minds. We changed to numbers but I think you deserve to be more than Three Nine Seven.” She looked at him sharply, “Particularly as you blew me up.”

“So was that a nickname or a title?” She could remember some of the names they’d had for identified but unknown enemies.

“Both,” he said. “It would look well, I think, on our family genealogy.”

“You seem confident that you can persuade me to marry you,” Mayin remarked as they reached the table she was sharing with her brother and sister-in-law.

“I appreciate you,” he replied calmly. “That departed gentleman from earlier seemed to lack the ability to do so. I am confident that you would fit better into a household with me than into one with someone like him.”

This is followed by Logic Fail (2).

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What does "Lang Mugou" mean?

While "I appreciate you" is a point in his favor, it seems unlikely to be sufficient by itself. But I don't know what Mayin would find sufficient.

"Lang Mugou" is my attempt at rendering the Chinese for "wolf bitch" into Roman letters using an online phonetic dictionary.

I think he's trying to build enough points in his favour that he gains overall acceptance. "I appreciate you," won't do it on its own but as one of many it will have it's use.

Interesting. OK!
I don't know the background at all.


“A fair answer,” the Ambassador acknowledged. “J have wondered,
→ I have wondered

“Oberxiao Huhn, didn’t trigger
> Take out the comma…

his left hand, the one that was still his own flesh ^ on her back
> … and use it here…

in what he hoped she would accept as a supportive gesture, “Allow me
> … but de-tail this one, to a period.

She looked at him sharply, “Particularly as you blew me up.”
> This one too.

Thank you for the typo catches. My only excuse is that I posted this long after I should have been in bed.

I'm sorry if I'm being obtuse, but what do you mean by "de-tail"?

I think thnidu, by "de-tail", means "change the comma to a period".

Yup, because when you remove the tail from a comma it is a period.

Follow the mayin tag back for the backstory, which IMO is worth reading. (I like Mayin.) A very short summary: Mayin volunteered for the military in an interstellar war (rather than wait for someone in her family to be drafted). The war is now over (her side won by natural catastrophe); she made it home more or less in one piece physically, but not unchanged, and is trying to figure out how to fit back into society back home. She was tracked down by a member of the opposing force, now a diplomat. His initial intent was derailed, and she hasn't decided to do about his current intentions.

Heh. THe poor departed gentleman appreciated the wrong things about her.

Including the usefulness of having her on his side. :)

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